Reflecting on the whole project as a whole i would say that everything went pretty well. The group didn't miss a deadline and we had a good storyline which made the show stand out. The internet as a whole changed the ways in which people could launch their very own micro-series as we have just done. Before, you had to pay for your show to be broadcast on television and still, it had to be judged to whether it could actually make a good program that would bring in the hits. But now, whatever you want to publish, can be published. You could be the biggest freak in the world and have the wierdest video to ever be seen, but it could be uploaded onto video sharing websites and the whole world can watch your video and you'd be surprised on how many people would actually watch it just because its wierd. It just proves my point that anything can be shown on the internet. But this was really useful for getting our series up and running.
Monday, 8 February 2010
Final Reflection
For this unit, in groups we were asked to produce and distribute an online micro-series. The series idea that we came up with as you should know by now was, Detention Deficit. Everything we were to do over the next few months would be dedicated to getting our micro-series up and running to the best we can as if we were an actual production company trying to make their show big. This would include marketing, the filming, editing and then finally the distribution of the show.
producers answers to what he thought of the series
are you happy with the 3 episodes of the webseries we made for you?
I am happy with the improved quality through the 3 series but i am very dissapointed by the lack of keeping to deadlines. this would have caused a number of serious issues were this a commercial brief. the episodes were too long as well. the third episode was the right length.
after interviewing members of the audeince, they said that they liked the second episodes length which was 4.30. they said that episode 3 was too short. what are your thoughts on that?
i'm glad that the audience responded well to the length but i still believe that it could have been shorter. on television there's a specific slot for a series. if the slot was 30minutes, the episode couldn't have been any longer. i suppose online it's different because you don't have the specific time gaps.
do you like the idea of the series, the fact that it's in a detention room?
i think the concept is very strong and i have been very excited by the idea from the beginning. i feel the first episode did not do justice to the concept but the last episode has a much stronger appeal.
what didn't you like about the series?
the bad language and needless aggression in the first episode. i liked the fact that you changed the offensive language into more inventive expressions of rage for the other episodes.
what did you like about the series?
The title sequence is very good, both in terms of genre conventions and technical ability. the whip cutting was very effective. i enjoyed the more surreal elements of the third episode as well.
what did you think of the characters, and the acting?
i thought matt hornby's performance and character consistently amusing. the other acting improved over time.
we missed deadlines and the lengths of the episodes you werent happy with either, but what could we have done better?
communicated better and looked out for each other more to ensure everything was completed to time and to a high enough standard.
if we made a fourth episode, what would you like us to include, and how would you like us to go about it?
continue in the slightly surreal, mighty-boosh like direction you have begun to take.
Interview With a Focus Group
INTERVIEWER: What are you initial thoughts and feelings of the micro-series?
It was comedy, and it was one of those things that you could watch again because its not bad bad, but its kind of bad good. Like, it knows it's bad, but it makes it good. Like with the editing and stuff.
They developed, the characters, as it went on. I thought the second episode was better than the first, and the 3rd one. There was a lot more comedy and action to it.
I think the girl should have been in it more because she was just there and she didn't really do anything.
I think the first one focused more on the development of the characters. Just introducing them separately. Then the second one had a story base, and then the third one is just kind of random. It was just trippy and 'getting high' for no apparant reason until the end.
INTERVIEWER: What do you think of the characters and their interactions?
Josh's character (Chris) It might have been the shot type, but it just felt like he had been pasted in there.
INTERVIEWER: The idea was that the characters in each episode didn't really notice he was there because he was kind of in the back of the room.
I really liked Keith's character. But I didn't really like the girls character, but thats because she didn't really do much. But my favourite character is keith, and I liked Sonny, and Pier. They're probably joint second.
You had a good range of characters, and they weren't the same or anything which was good.
And they were really different which was good.
INTERVIEWER: Do you prefer the first, second or third episode and why?
The second one, because it didn't have all the hassle of the first one and the third one was just a bit confusing.
INTERVIEWER: Do you think it worked though?
I think the effect was to confuse the audience which worked, but it was just a bit weird and random. In terms of story-line.
INTERVIEWER: So did you prefer the second one?
I did prefer the second one but I got what was happening in the third one.
I prefered the second one. I though the first episode was too long and the thrid one was too short.
INTERVIEWER: Was the episode structure for the second and third episodes better than the first?
It flowed better than the first one.
INTERVIEWER: What do you think of the fan page on Facebook?
I havent seen a lot of it so far but from what I've seen i think it's good. I like the idea of posting things from the characters perspectives.
Yes, it gives you more of an insight into the characters.
I like the fan page, it's quite simple, but effective. It does keep it interesting, like you said about the characters posting things. It keeps the background story going for the web-series.
INTERVIEWER: The target audience was people our age. 16-21. Do you think Facebook is a good place for a fan page?
Yeah, definitely.
INTERVIEWER: Do you all have facebook?
(All four) Yes
INTERVIEWER: What do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
Development of the second episode.I think you should cut out the swearing because it's just like a beep a minute. I know it was just in the first one but it was just like beep after beep after beep.
I'd quite like the same setting as the second one, but with a different story-line and different characters.Maybe have one or two main characters, and then rotate the other characters around. So you get to see the old characters, like the audience favourites, but then you get to see their new reactions with the new characters.
INTERVIEWER: What are the good and bad points of the episodes? Let's start with the first one...
It was too long, and too much swearing. The good points were that it managed to establish a good base for the episodes to start on, and it wasn't too tiresome that you couldn't watch it again.I think the first one introduced the characters well. There was too much swearing though, it was just beep, beep, beep.
I think you focus the humour too much on Keith going crazy at the beginning. Apart from the Frijj bit which was really funny. Good word play, but I found that there were the two funny bits, you need to stretch the comedy out. I found myself waiting the whole episode for the Frijj joke. There should be more.
INTERVIEWER: What about the second one?
I really liked the second one. It was funny and it had a good story.
I liked it too, and throughout all three of the episodes, the characters managed to stay the same which was good. Sometimes in television series the characters change. They're nice one time and then they're really horrible the next but your characters didn't change.
The only bad point was when you looked at the camera and when the teacher was at the door. But every time I see that it makes me laugh anyway.
INTERVIEWER: What about the third one then?
It was too short, I got the idea you were trying to create an element of confusion but it kind of gave it away a bit with the title so maybe something a little bit more criptic could have worked better.
I didn't like the teachers acting. She was smiling too much about the fact that theres been a gas leak.
INTERVIEWER: Who is your favourite character?
I'd have to say Sonny, your character. it just made me laugh the way he kept hitting people. It was just one of those things I, personally, found hilarious.
Little things please little minds...[Laughs]
I just really liked your reactions.I liked Keith.I liked the one who kept trying to escape, Pier.
INTERVIEWER: Did you think the acting was good?
I think the acting was good for all the characters.
INTERVIEWER: What did you think of vince as a character?
It felt as if he was just stuck on there to fill screen time because he kind of just sat there and said something every now and then.I think he's one of those characters that doesn't really do or say much but hes a part of it. And makes the whole thing whole.
INTERVIEWER: What makes the micro-series watchable?
Humour, slapstick humour. Nonsense really. Silly stuff.The comedic stuff. The way it was random, but good random.
It was just really funny.
It was comedy, and it was one of those things that you could watch again because its not bad bad, but its kind of bad good. Like, it knows it's bad, but it makes it good. Like with the editing and stuff.
They developed, the characters, as it went on. I thought the second episode was better than the first, and the 3rd one. There was a lot more comedy and action to it.
I think the girl should have been in it more because she was just there and she didn't really do anything.
I think the first one focused more on the development of the characters. Just introducing them separately. Then the second one had a story base, and then the third one is just kind of random. It was just trippy and 'getting high' for no apparant reason until the end.
INTERVIEWER: What do you think of the characters and their interactions?
Josh's character (Chris) It might have been the shot type, but it just felt like he had been pasted in there.
INTERVIEWER: The idea was that the characters in each episode didn't really notice he was there because he was kind of in the back of the room.
I really liked Keith's character. But I didn't really like the girls character, but thats because she didn't really do much. But my favourite character is keith, and I liked Sonny, and Pier. They're probably joint second.
You had a good range of characters, and they weren't the same or anything which was good.
And they were really different which was good.
INTERVIEWER: Do you prefer the first, second or third episode and why?
The second one, because it didn't have all the hassle of the first one and the third one was just a bit confusing.
INTERVIEWER: Do you think it worked though?
I think the effect was to confuse the audience which worked, but it was just a bit weird and random. In terms of story-line.
INTERVIEWER: So did you prefer the second one?
I did prefer the second one but I got what was happening in the third one.
I prefered the second one. I though the first episode was too long and the thrid one was too short.
INTERVIEWER: Was the episode structure for the second and third episodes better than the first?
It flowed better than the first one.
INTERVIEWER: What do you think of the fan page on Facebook?
I havent seen a lot of it so far but from what I've seen i think it's good. I like the idea of posting things from the characters perspectives.
Yes, it gives you more of an insight into the characters.
I like the fan page, it's quite simple, but effective. It does keep it interesting, like you said about the characters posting things. It keeps the background story going for the web-series.
INTERVIEWER: The target audience was people our age. 16-21. Do you think Facebook is a good place for a fan page?
Yeah, definitely.
INTERVIEWER: Do you all have facebook?
(All four) Yes
INTERVIEWER: What do you think could be improved for the next episode if we made one?
Development of the second episode.I think you should cut out the swearing because it's just like a beep a minute. I know it was just in the first one but it was just like beep after beep after beep.
I'd quite like the same setting as the second one, but with a different story-line and different characters.Maybe have one or two main characters, and then rotate the other characters around. So you get to see the old characters, like the audience favourites, but then you get to see their new reactions with the new characters.
INTERVIEWER: What are the good and bad points of the episodes? Let's start with the first one...
It was too long, and too much swearing. The good points were that it managed to establish a good base for the episodes to start on, and it wasn't too tiresome that you couldn't watch it again.I think the first one introduced the characters well. There was too much swearing though, it was just beep, beep, beep.
I think you focus the humour too much on Keith going crazy at the beginning. Apart from the Frijj bit which was really funny. Good word play, but I found that there were the two funny bits, you need to stretch the comedy out. I found myself waiting the whole episode for the Frijj joke. There should be more.
INTERVIEWER: What about the second one?
I really liked the second one. It was funny and it had a good story.
I liked it too, and throughout all three of the episodes, the characters managed to stay the same which was good. Sometimes in television series the characters change. They're nice one time and then they're really horrible the next but your characters didn't change.
The only bad point was when you looked at the camera and when the teacher was at the door. But every time I see that it makes me laugh anyway.
INTERVIEWER: What about the third one then?
It was too short, I got the idea you were trying to create an element of confusion but it kind of gave it away a bit with the title so maybe something a little bit more criptic could have worked better.
I didn't like the teachers acting. She was smiling too much about the fact that theres been a gas leak.
INTERVIEWER: Who is your favourite character?
I'd have to say Sonny, your character. it just made me laugh the way he kept hitting people. It was just one of those things I, personally, found hilarious.
Little things please little minds...[Laughs]
I just really liked your reactions.I liked Keith.I liked the one who kept trying to escape, Pier.
INTERVIEWER: Did you think the acting was good?
I think the acting was good for all the characters.
INTERVIEWER: What did you think of vince as a character?
It felt as if he was just stuck on there to fill screen time because he kind of just sat there and said something every now and then.I think he's one of those characters that doesn't really do or say much but hes a part of it. And makes the whole thing whole.
INTERVIEWER: What makes the micro-series watchable?
Humour, slapstick humour. Nonsense really. Silly stuff.The comedic stuff. The way it was random, but good random.
It was just really funny.
Script 3
script for episode 3 - gas leak
pier: why are you always getting at me? your always around me. where is the pen? vince! (pause) your always, like getting at me. i just cant stand it, the one time..
sonny: (interrupts) well think of a desent plan then and i'll stop getting at you.
pier: i just cant think of a plan, like, what the hell. (looks at keith)
sonny: you are such a vegetarian
shot of keith looking really 'out of it'. sonny and pier stare at him unable to figure out whats up with him. vince goes to see if he's okay.
vince: what seems to be the matter keith?
keith: i have eaten a rare amasoneon coffee bean. (sticks head up while talking and then continues looking around the room)
vince: aah, i see where you're going
shot of vince is from keiths perspective. everythings colourful and morphing.
sonny: what are you two talking about?
pier: yea, what are you two talking about?
vince and keith are talking in gibberish and sonny and pier can't make out what their saying.
sonny: am i missing something here?
pier and sonny look confused at eachother and then continue looking at vince and keith. damien walks through the door
damien: alright guys
keith: aah, cheif. (rubs face paint on his face to look like a red indian. the face paint magically appears with no explanation of why its there) get this spirit out of me
the next shot is of damien but he looks like cheif from 'one flew over the kookoos nest'
fade out
the next scene is where everyone is forming a vitual around keith. keith is lying on the table in the middle of the class chanting something. damien transorms into cheif again. pier is sitting on a table with sonny lying on him.
pier: sonny, do you remember the other day, when, when we were locked in the classroom and i tried to get out the door. and you.
sonny: i smashed your head, i smashed your head
pier: you smashed my head
sonny and pier laugh histerically
next scene everyone is dancing round keith like it's an actual ritual. all the characters have changed their appearance slightly. clothes torn and swapping clothes etc.
after a while a teacher walks in the door looking worried
teacher: oh my god, are you alright, i can't believe you're still alive.
everyone stops dancing and everyone looks normal again though their appearance is the same. basically, they look a mess.
teacher: there's been a massive gas leak
everyone collapses due to the gas they've been breathing in.
fade out
pier: why are you always getting at me? your always around me. where is the pen? vince! (pause) your always, like getting at me. i just cant stand it, the one time..
sonny: (interrupts) well think of a desent plan then and i'll stop getting at you.
pier: i just cant think of a plan, like, what the hell. (looks at keith)
sonny: you are such a vegetarian
shot of keith looking really 'out of it'. sonny and pier stare at him unable to figure out whats up with him. vince goes to see if he's okay.
vince: what seems to be the matter keith?
keith: i have eaten a rare amasoneon coffee bean. (sticks head up while talking and then continues looking around the room)
vince: aah, i see where you're going
shot of vince is from keiths perspective. everythings colourful and morphing.
sonny: what are you two talking about?
pier: yea, what are you two talking about?
vince and keith are talking in gibberish and sonny and pier can't make out what their saying.
sonny: am i missing something here?
pier and sonny look confused at eachother and then continue looking at vince and keith. damien walks through the door
damien: alright guys
keith: aah, cheif. (rubs face paint on his face to look like a red indian. the face paint magically appears with no explanation of why its there) get this spirit out of me
the next shot is of damien but he looks like cheif from 'one flew over the kookoos nest'
fade out
the next scene is where everyone is forming a vitual around keith. keith is lying on the table in the middle of the class chanting something. damien transorms into cheif again. pier is sitting on a table with sonny lying on him.
pier: sonny, do you remember the other day, when, when we were locked in the classroom and i tried to get out the door. and you.
sonny: i smashed your head, i smashed your head
pier: you smashed my head
sonny and pier laugh histerically
next scene everyone is dancing round keith like it's an actual ritual. all the characters have changed their appearance slightly. clothes torn and swapping clothes etc.
after a while a teacher walks in the door looking worried
teacher: oh my god, are you alright, i can't believe you're still alive.
everyone stops dancing and everyone looks normal again though their appearance is the same. basically, they look a mess.
teacher: there's been a massive gas leak
everyone collapses due to the gas they've been breathing in.
fade out
Script 2
detention deficit
episode 2 ‘trapped’
starts off with everyone sitting down at their desks, sonny starts talking to keith
sonny: keith. we’ve been sitting here for 15 minutes now. why haven’t you annoyed me yet?
keith: (looks frustrated with sonny) I'm pacing myself
sonny: so, you’re going to annoy me in a little while instead
keith: no. you ignoranus
sonny: (laughs)
vince and valerie start talking over sonny laughing
vince: what did you call him?
valerie: ignoranus, what the hell have you been smoking in your crack pipe.
sonny: crack (continues laughing)
pier: guys, i’ve nailed it. i have nailed it (bangs book on desk)
keith: sorry, but am i going completely mad? (raises voice)
valerie: going?
sonny: you’ve been a patient at the fucking luni-bin for a while mate
keith: can i just explain how im pacing my. fucking self
sonny: well, it happens
pier: what
sonny: he’s annoying me again
keith: fuck you guys
pause for a while
vince: enlighten me keith
keith: i’ve left my redbull outside the door. so i’m only allowed some every 30 minutes. it should help me sleep. hence, why i’m pacing myself.
everyone stares at him
vince: you didn’t enlighten me
chris: really. (everyone stares) how’s it working out for you. that’s a good idea. good little system. pacing yourself. i do the same for when i play guitar. i don’t want to overwork myself, you know.
everyone continues staring, silence
sonny: who. the. fuck. are you? (shocked face)
chris: i’m chris, pleased to meet you
valerie: why are you in detention then, did you kiss the teachers arse too much
pier: you do seem the type that would stay out, if i’m honest
chris: i chewed gum in class.
vince: i’ve seen things you wouldn’t believe
pause
sonny: wrong moment vince
vince: sorry
pier: (speaking to chris) is that all
chris: yeh, nothing really bad. why you in detention then?
pier: if i told you, i’d have to kill you
fade out
keith and chris are sitting together
keith: thanks for thinking my idea was good by the way. these guys don’t appreciate me.
chris: that’s alright. actually. it’s half past now. you want me to go get your red bull from outside?
keith: (excited voice, slightly nagging) oh yes please. that’d be great. (laughs) if i didn’t have that. i’d probably los the plot. have an axiety attack or something.
chris: that’s okay, i’ll go get it
chris goes to open door, but it doesn’t open
chris: uh, guys. the door isn’t opening
keith: what! (loud, going out of control)
keith starts having an axiety attack, shaking his shoulders. sonny walks up to him and punches him in the face. he falls onto his chair.
sonny: i am not going through that shit again
valerie: the less of that the better
sonny: don’t talk to me
valerie: screw you sonny
chris: what the hell is wrong with you?
sonny: trust me, you’ll thank me later
vince: he is a crazy, moonstruck hound junkie. he needs to be controlled
pier: (talks to chris) did you say the doors locked?
chris: why else would hound junkie have gone fucking mental
sonny: you’re learning
pier: so, i’m trapped here? (looks worried)
chris: yes. we all are
sonny: that’s alright, pier will think of a plan
pier: (awkward laugh) yeh. sure. i’ll think of something
valerie: what. is your mind blank?
vince: what about your amazing idea earlier
pier: i’ll think of another one. that plan isn’t well suited for this type of escape
sonny: type of escape...(interrupts)
pier: stay the fuck out of this sonny. i’ll think of a plan. just give me a minute to gather my thoughts.
fade out.
fades in - 20 minutes later
chris: it’s been ages. a teacher hasn’t even come and checked up on us.
sonny: they don’t. teachers. they’re quite happy to just leave us here to rot. we’re trash to them. we’re the ones who fuck the system. and when your in here, your trash too.
chris: i’m not trash, i’m a good student.
valerie: no your not. you’re a fucking criminal.
vince: i don’t see what’s so special about rugby balls anyway. wilson this and wilson that. basket balls are better. i could have a good conversation with a basket ball
everyone looks over at vince
chris: what are you talking about?
vince: when we’ve been driven to madness. i wanna know who my best friend will be
chris: and you chose a basket ball?
vince: yeh
sonny: suppose they got a nice tan. just don’t impregnate it, might have loadsa golf balls rolling about.
vince: you don’t understand. you’re not ready for the truth
chris: i need to get out of here, any plan yet?
pier: i can’t think. i’m lost. i’m lost.( hangs his head in shame, crying)
sonny: every single fucking day, you think of a plan to escape. every. single, fucking day. are you telling me that the one day we need to a plan, you can’t think of one?
pier: i’m sorry (wails) i’m lost
sonny: you can do it, think
pier: i can’t
sonny: yes you can. ( stands up and grabs piers head) use your head!
rams piers head into the door
valerie: great. now what?
chris: we’re trapped
sonny: fuck sake, stand back, i’ll get the door open
sonny kicks the door really hard, nothing happens
chris: we’re screwed.
pier: (wakes back up) uh, what happened
sonny: call a doctor
pier: sonny, i’m fine, just got a fucking bad headache.
chris: not surprised ( murmurs)
sonny: not for you dipshit
valerie/chris: who
sonny: for me. i think i’ve just broken my leg
end credits
episode 2 ‘trapped’
starts off with everyone sitting down at their desks, sonny starts talking to keith
sonny: keith. we’ve been sitting here for 15 minutes now. why haven’t you annoyed me yet?
keith: (looks frustrated with sonny) I'm pacing myself
sonny: so, you’re going to annoy me in a little while instead
keith: no. you ignoranus
sonny: (laughs)
vince and valerie start talking over sonny laughing
vince: what did you call him?
valerie: ignoranus, what the hell have you been smoking in your crack pipe.
sonny: crack (continues laughing)
pier: guys, i’ve nailed it. i have nailed it (bangs book on desk)
keith: sorry, but am i going completely mad? (raises voice)
valerie: going?
sonny: you’ve been a patient at the fucking luni-bin for a while mate
keith: can i just explain how im pacing my. fucking self
sonny: well, it happens
pier: what
sonny: he’s annoying me again
keith: fuck you guys
pause for a while
vince: enlighten me keith
keith: i’ve left my redbull outside the door. so i’m only allowed some every 30 minutes. it should help me sleep. hence, why i’m pacing myself.
everyone stares at him
vince: you didn’t enlighten me
chris: really. (everyone stares) how’s it working out for you. that’s a good idea. good little system. pacing yourself. i do the same for when i play guitar. i don’t want to overwork myself, you know.
everyone continues staring, silence
sonny: who. the. fuck. are you? (shocked face)
chris: i’m chris, pleased to meet you
valerie: why are you in detention then, did you kiss the teachers arse too much
pier: you do seem the type that would stay out, if i’m honest
chris: i chewed gum in class.
vince: i’ve seen things you wouldn’t believe
pause
sonny: wrong moment vince
vince: sorry
pier: (speaking to chris) is that all
chris: yeh, nothing really bad. why you in detention then?
pier: if i told you, i’d have to kill you
fade out
keith and chris are sitting together
keith: thanks for thinking my idea was good by the way. these guys don’t appreciate me.
chris: that’s alright. actually. it’s half past now. you want me to go get your red bull from outside?
keith: (excited voice, slightly nagging) oh yes please. that’d be great. (laughs) if i didn’t have that. i’d probably los the plot. have an axiety attack or something.
chris: that’s okay, i’ll go get it
chris goes to open door, but it doesn’t open
chris: uh, guys. the door isn’t opening
keith: what! (loud, going out of control)
keith starts having an axiety attack, shaking his shoulders. sonny walks up to him and punches him in the face. he falls onto his chair.
sonny: i am not going through that shit again
valerie: the less of that the better
sonny: don’t talk to me
valerie: screw you sonny
chris: what the hell is wrong with you?
sonny: trust me, you’ll thank me later
vince: he is a crazy, moonstruck hound junkie. he needs to be controlled
pier: (talks to chris) did you say the doors locked?
chris: why else would hound junkie have gone fucking mental
sonny: you’re learning
pier: so, i’m trapped here? (looks worried)
chris: yes. we all are
sonny: that’s alright, pier will think of a plan
pier: (awkward laugh) yeh. sure. i’ll think of something
valerie: what. is your mind blank?
vince: what about your amazing idea earlier
pier: i’ll think of another one. that plan isn’t well suited for this type of escape
sonny: type of escape...(interrupts)
pier: stay the fuck out of this sonny. i’ll think of a plan. just give me a minute to gather my thoughts.
fade out.
fades in - 20 minutes later
chris: it’s been ages. a teacher hasn’t even come and checked up on us.
sonny: they don’t. teachers. they’re quite happy to just leave us here to rot. we’re trash to them. we’re the ones who fuck the system. and when your in here, your trash too.
chris: i’m not trash, i’m a good student.
valerie: no your not. you’re a fucking criminal.
vince: i don’t see what’s so special about rugby balls anyway. wilson this and wilson that. basket balls are better. i could have a good conversation with a basket ball
everyone looks over at vince
chris: what are you talking about?
vince: when we’ve been driven to madness. i wanna know who my best friend will be
chris: and you chose a basket ball?
vince: yeh
sonny: suppose they got a nice tan. just don’t impregnate it, might have loadsa golf balls rolling about.
vince: you don’t understand. you’re not ready for the truth
chris: i need to get out of here, any plan yet?
pier: i can’t think. i’m lost. i’m lost.( hangs his head in shame, crying)
sonny: every single fucking day, you think of a plan to escape. every. single, fucking day. are you telling me that the one day we need to a plan, you can’t think of one?
pier: i’m sorry (wails) i’m lost
sonny: you can do it, think
pier: i can’t
sonny: yes you can. ( stands up and grabs piers head) use your head!
rams piers head into the door
valerie: great. now what?
chris: we’re trapped
sonny: fuck sake, stand back, i’ll get the door open
sonny kicks the door really hard, nothing happens
chris: we’re screwed.
pier: (wakes back up) uh, what happened
sonny: call a doctor
pier: sonny, i’m fine, just got a fucking bad headache.
chris: not surprised ( murmurs)
sonny: not for you dipshit
valerie/chris: who
sonny: for me. i think i’ve just broken my leg
end credits
Script 1
Detention deficit – Pilot episode script
Starts with pier looking bored leaning on his desk. He looks at the clock, the hand keeps on moving slower and slower. Even goes backwards. Sound of the clock out rules everything else. This is pier zoning out on the clock. Sounds comes back and you can hear Keith mumbling. This turns into Keith talking really quickly. Keith is talking to pier.
Keith: (talking really quickly, hard to make out what he’s saying)
Pier: (sighs)
Pier looks at sonny. Sonny understands what’s on Piers mind.
Sonny: he loco
Pier: (laughs)
Keith knows that he was being made fun of but he continues talking
Sonny: (interrupts Keith) you know what. Uh, Keith. (Pause) you need to talk more. I’m starting to forget you’re here.
Keith: (mocking what sonny has just said to him) “you know what”. You’re really, fucking rude. You need some manners. I’m talking about life. The world. Emotions. Feelings. All that shit. Stuff that brings people closer together. And you’re taking that away.
After keith has told sonny how he feels, sonny throws a pencil case at his face.
Sonny: you talk too much. (aggressive tone)
Keith looks really wound up. His eye starts twitching
Pier: you’ve set him off now. They’ll be no stopping him. You’ve unleashed the ultimate evil. Pandora’s Box. Has been opened.
Sonny: what are you saying? (Looks frustrated and slightly nervous) he does it all the fucking time. He drinks more coffee than the teachers.
Pier: I have a plan to escape, unharmed by the beast
Sonny: Keith
Pier: that one yea. Anyway, the plan is. we tie shoelaces together, until it’s long enough to use as a rope. And then we simply climb down out the window. I call it, ‘operation window lace’.
Sonny: wow pier, not too bad. Apart from the fact that we’re on the ground floor already. (Slaps pier round the back of the head) and what’s wrong with just walking through the door.
Just after sonny finished talking, a pencil case hits him in the face, Keith threw it at him
Sonny: crap!
Keith runs around making a mess of the room, running and moving really quickly. He’s gone insane.
Pier: same old shit. Different day
Fades out, then fades in with “15minutes later”
Keith is lying on the floor after a caffeine come down. The room is a dip.
Sonny: (walking over to keith to see how he is) he’s got to get off this, its turning him into a monster.
Sonny picks up a monster can next to Keith
Valerie walks over as well.
Valerie: look at the room, he’s trashed it. He’s a devil.
Valerie picks up a can of red devil from near keith
Sonny: he needs to kick this shit in.
Sonny picks up a big bottle of kick
Sonny: why are you talking to me (frustrated aggressive tone)
Valerie: don’t know. Everyone in this room is a freak anyway.
Pier walks past
Pier: aye aye aye
Sonny: well. Don’t talk to me
Valerie: (looks at camera) who’s that?
Sonny: I said don’t talk to me.
Valerie: who’s sitting under the table?
Vince: (long pause) hey
Vince get’s out from under the table. Gets out awkwardly, rustling tin foil and gear
Valerie: who are you?
Sonny: that’s Vince. Alright Vince? I haven’t seen you around for ages. You been under the table all this time? (sniggers)
Vince: yes (calm voice)
Sonny: bloody hell mate, I was only joking. What the fuck you playing at. Hiding under the table. Toddlers do that. You’re not a toddler.
Vince: I’ve been here, to prevent intrusion of my mind
Valerie: (looks surprised) okay
They all go to sit down
Sonny: (looks at time, only half an hour has passed) what. This is bullshit
Valerie: speaking of bullshit. What’s this I hear about you throwing a fridge at Damien?
Pier: I heard about that too (continues drawing his plans)
Sonny: there’s nothing much more to say. I threw a fridge at Damien. He annoyed me. Thought it was pretty funny.
Flashback scene where you find out it was a frijj milkshake
Valerie: what a load of shit. Why do you make up stuff as ridiculous as that. You’re an idiot sonny. A first degree idiot.
Sonny: shut up. It’s true.
Valerie: yeah, whatever.
Fades out, fades in
Valerie goes to sit next to Vince. Vince is drawing something in his book.
Valerie: hey vince. What you doing.
Vince: just some drawing. It’s a good way to pass time. And let my creativity spill out.
Valerie: (looking at his work) what is it?
Vince: (putting a lot of detail into picture. Looking concentrated) out of all the ones I’ve seen. This. Is my favourite crop circle.
Valerie: oh
Vince: it’s just so textured and the shape is so alien. It’s just amazing
Valerie: yea, amazing (sounds sarcastic)
Shows the page with a simple circle on the paper. Valerie goes to sit near sonny. Sonny is talking to pier
Sonny: you’ve been doing detention for ages now. Do you feel any different? Have you changed?
Valerie: are you rehabilitated?
Sonny: shut up, what does that mean anyway
Pier: rehabilitated? Well now, let me see. You know, I don’t have any idea what that means.
Sonny: it means have you..
Pier: I know what you think it means sonny. To me it’s just a made up word. A politicians word, so young fella’s like…
Sonny: stop quoting stuff pier. Dammit (frustrated)
They all go quiet for a moment
Sonny: could time possibly go any slower
Vince: the more you concentrate on the time, the slower it will go
Sonny: did you have to tell me that. Shit
Pier: aye aye aye. I can’t think of a better plan than window lace
Valerie: im bored. When can I go
Sonny: you can’t go until the teacher has dismissed us.
Vince: sometimes, he forgets.
Pier: no need to worry everyone. I’ve almost got a plan.
Sonny: I’m going to lose my mind in a minute
Vince: it will feel more like 3 minutes because you’re staring at the clock like that.
Valerie: could this get any worse
Keith wakes up with his twitchy eye
Sonny: oh shit
Starts with pier looking bored leaning on his desk. He looks at the clock, the hand keeps on moving slower and slower. Even goes backwards. Sound of the clock out rules everything else. This is pier zoning out on the clock. Sounds comes back and you can hear Keith mumbling. This turns into Keith talking really quickly. Keith is talking to pier.
Keith: (talking really quickly, hard to make out what he’s saying)
Pier: (sighs)
Pier looks at sonny. Sonny understands what’s on Piers mind.
Sonny: he loco
Pier: (laughs)
Keith knows that he was being made fun of but he continues talking
Sonny: (interrupts Keith) you know what. Uh, Keith. (Pause) you need to talk more. I’m starting to forget you’re here.
Keith: (mocking what sonny has just said to him) “you know what”. You’re really, fucking rude. You need some manners. I’m talking about life. The world. Emotions. Feelings. All that shit. Stuff that brings people closer together. And you’re taking that away.
After keith has told sonny how he feels, sonny throws a pencil case at his face.
Sonny: you talk too much. (aggressive tone)
Keith looks really wound up. His eye starts twitching
Pier: you’ve set him off now. They’ll be no stopping him. You’ve unleashed the ultimate evil. Pandora’s Box. Has been opened.
Sonny: what are you saying? (Looks frustrated and slightly nervous) he does it all the fucking time. He drinks more coffee than the teachers.
Pier: I have a plan to escape, unharmed by the beast
Sonny: Keith
Pier: that one yea. Anyway, the plan is. we tie shoelaces together, until it’s long enough to use as a rope. And then we simply climb down out the window. I call it, ‘operation window lace’.
Sonny: wow pier, not too bad. Apart from the fact that we’re on the ground floor already. (Slaps pier round the back of the head) and what’s wrong with just walking through the door.
Just after sonny finished talking, a pencil case hits him in the face, Keith threw it at him
Sonny: crap!
Keith runs around making a mess of the room, running and moving really quickly. He’s gone insane.
Pier: same old shit. Different day
Fades out, then fades in with “15minutes later”
Keith is lying on the floor after a caffeine come down. The room is a dip.
Sonny: (walking over to keith to see how he is) he’s got to get off this, its turning him into a monster.
Sonny picks up a monster can next to Keith
Valerie walks over as well.
Valerie: look at the room, he’s trashed it. He’s a devil.
Valerie picks up a can of red devil from near keith
Sonny: he needs to kick this shit in.
Sonny picks up a big bottle of kick
Sonny: why are you talking to me (frustrated aggressive tone)
Valerie: don’t know. Everyone in this room is a freak anyway.
Pier walks past
Pier: aye aye aye
Sonny: well. Don’t talk to me
Valerie: (looks at camera) who’s that?
Sonny: I said don’t talk to me.
Valerie: who’s sitting under the table?
Vince: (long pause) hey
Vince get’s out from under the table. Gets out awkwardly, rustling tin foil and gear
Valerie: who are you?
Sonny: that’s Vince. Alright Vince? I haven’t seen you around for ages. You been under the table all this time? (sniggers)
Vince: yes (calm voice)
Sonny: bloody hell mate, I was only joking. What the fuck you playing at. Hiding under the table. Toddlers do that. You’re not a toddler.
Vince: I’ve been here, to prevent intrusion of my mind
Valerie: (looks surprised) okay
They all go to sit down
Sonny: (looks at time, only half an hour has passed) what. This is bullshit
Valerie: speaking of bullshit. What’s this I hear about you throwing a fridge at Damien?
Pier: I heard about that too (continues drawing his plans)
Sonny: there’s nothing much more to say. I threw a fridge at Damien. He annoyed me. Thought it was pretty funny.
Flashback scene where you find out it was a frijj milkshake
Valerie: what a load of shit. Why do you make up stuff as ridiculous as that. You’re an idiot sonny. A first degree idiot.
Sonny: shut up. It’s true.
Valerie: yeah, whatever.
Fades out, fades in
Valerie goes to sit next to Vince. Vince is drawing something in his book.
Valerie: hey vince. What you doing.
Vince: just some drawing. It’s a good way to pass time. And let my creativity spill out.
Valerie: (looking at his work) what is it?
Vince: (putting a lot of detail into picture. Looking concentrated) out of all the ones I’ve seen. This. Is my favourite crop circle.
Valerie: oh
Vince: it’s just so textured and the shape is so alien. It’s just amazing
Valerie: yea, amazing (sounds sarcastic)
Shows the page with a simple circle on the paper. Valerie goes to sit near sonny. Sonny is talking to pier
Sonny: you’ve been doing detention for ages now. Do you feel any different? Have you changed?
Valerie: are you rehabilitated?
Sonny: shut up, what does that mean anyway
Pier: rehabilitated? Well now, let me see. You know, I don’t have any idea what that means.
Sonny: it means have you..
Pier: I know what you think it means sonny. To me it’s just a made up word. A politicians word, so young fella’s like…
Sonny: stop quoting stuff pier. Dammit (frustrated)
They all go quiet for a moment
Sonny: could time possibly go any slower
Vince: the more you concentrate on the time, the slower it will go
Sonny: did you have to tell me that. Shit
Pier: aye aye aye. I can’t think of a better plan than window lace
Valerie: im bored. When can I go
Sonny: you can’t go until the teacher has dismissed us.
Vince: sometimes, he forgets.
Pier: no need to worry everyone. I’ve almost got a plan.
Sonny: I’m going to lose my mind in a minute
Vince: it will feel more like 3 minutes because you’re staring at the clock like that.
Valerie: could this get any worse
Keith wakes up with his twitchy eye
Sonny: oh shit
Screen Grabs
These screen grabs are taken from dofferent video sharing and communal websites. It shows our videos are up on the internet and we have fan pages and stuff.
This first grab is taken from Vimeo.com, a video sharing community.
The second grab is from our youtube page.
And this one is our facebook page.
The second grab is from our youtube page.
And this one is our facebook page.
Episode 2
Detention Deficit TRAPPED from Hayden Martin on Vimeo.
The gang are trapped! Alongside the irritating likes of a detoxing Keith and a very geeky special guest...
Wednesday, 3 February 2010
Class Feedback Episode 1 (negative&possitive)
Positive:
Good Opening Sequence x 2
Good establishing shots x 2
Good sound track
Milk shake shot good
Confident Characters
Well acted in places x 3
Good range of shots
Negative:
Tried way to hard to be funny
Girl isn't good actor
James way too extreme
Sound level not the same
Out side shot - flashback - needs to be clearer
Shots when characters look into camera don't work
Music cuts too quick
Way too long x 2
Too much swearing x 3
Not bleeped properly x 3
Alex's character changes too much
Shots look studenty
Should close up on cans
Too angry
Flashback too repetitive
Nobody does detention in a computer room
Characters kinda dull
Credits too fast
Door scene does not make sense x 2
Pier isn't french enough?
Too much fade out
Music too loud made them jump x 2
Unrealistic Characters
Good Opening Sequence x 2
Good establishing shots x 2
Good sound track
Milk shake shot good
Confident Characters
Well acted in places x 3
Good range of shots
Negative:
Tried way to hard to be funny
Girl isn't good actor
James way too extreme
Sound level not the same
Out side shot - flashback - needs to be clearer
Shots when characters look into camera don't work
Music cuts too quick
Way too long x 2
Too much swearing x 3
Not bleeped properly x 3
Alex's character changes too much
Shots look studenty
Should close up on cans
Too angry
Flashback too repetitive
Nobody does detention in a computer room
Characters kinda dull
Credits too fast
Door scene does not make sense x 2
Pier isn't french enough?
Too much fade out
Music too loud made them jump x 2
Unrealistic Characters
End Credit Research
The credits I researched were taken from, "You rang m'lord"
I done this just to confirm what order everything had to be in i.e.. director, actors, sound all that stuff.
Jeffrey Holland
Su Pollard
Donald Hewlett
Micheal Knowles
Bill Pertwee
Brenda Cowling
Mavis Pugh
Susie Brann
Catherine Rabett
Perry Benson
Barbara New
John Horsley
Angela Scoular
Frank Williams
Yvonne Marsh
John D. Collins
Maurice Denham
Volande Palfrey
Angela Easterling
Script by Jimmy Perry and David Croft
Signature Tune Composed by Jimmy Perry and Roy Moore
Performed by Bob Monkhouse and Paul Shane
Costume Designer Mary Husband
Make-up Designer Jill Hagger
Properties Buyers Jayne Libotte Nick Barnett
Visual Effects Designer Colin Mapson
Graphic Designer Andy Carroll
Camera Supervisor John Vincent
Videotape Editor Peter Bird
Resource Co-ordinator Andrew Breaks
Vision Mixer Hilary West
Production Assistant Christine Mellor
Assistant Floor Managers Jeremy Connor Beccy Fawcett
Sound Michael McCarthy
Lighting Director Duncan Brown
Production Manager Charles Garland
Designer Gwen Evans
Directed by Roy Gould
Produced by David Croft BBC MCMXCI
Monday, 1 February 2010
Shooting Episode 3
Today we will be shooting the episode. We will probably travel to long road and use the same room if we can, i short that we shoot at Coleridge though, due to the nice space in the meeting room that is hardly ever occupied. If we travel all the way to Long Road and can't get hold of a room then we will be in deep doodoo.
Shooting Episode 3
We have come across a few problems whilst planning to shoot the 3rd episode, we were given lots of other tasks over the time that we were meant to be actually shooting the project. So now, we are going to be all rushed to finish this episode and may not have the best look or sitcom feel.
Today is monday, and we might have to get the whole thing done by tonight! We will find out and hopefully we will have more time than expected.
Language Problem
Due to swearing being quite a large problem in our episode, we have agreed that we will cut the offensive language and replace with comical insults.
Here is a list that Matt and Hayden came up with!
gick - shit
turd
apache
twanger
wazzock
flange
shut up you brain donor
nail clipper
oxygen theif
sad act
div
mug
muppet
cretin
pleb
facicious
merc
ladies front bottom
doody face
vegetarian
log
donkey milker
butt breath
flap
knackers
gazungas
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